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Light + Size 

Analysis Template 

Template has been changed.

o        line to remain to opposite edge of page.

o        "scale" to remain as template indicated

Key:

o        no border around.

o        no undelining of text

- Analytic drawings should be in section not elevation, indicating light paths and cones.

- Image titles to be beneath drawings i.e text beneath plans, in lower case.

- Plans can be moved to the right of the diagram once second elevation is removed, text to be left aligned.

- Weak analysis of airflow - should indicate direction and flow of air, not only entrance.

- Openings to be indicated clearly in section.

- Indicate light reflection path acurately, if relevant.

- Drawing to fit within margins ie. top of elevation to line up with top of number 01.

- Plans indicating size can be cleaner, no need for furniture cars etc.

- Show sun angle in section/ axo at different times of year at noon (summer, winter, spring/autumn)

- Show sun diagram in plan, highlighting orientation and length of sun penetration throughout year

- Remove elevations

- Size - not just areas but width, length and heights

- Air flow, show entry (if windows operable) and show how air would move through spaces

- Ensure scale is correct

Suggestions for Design Template:

All annotations in Arial, point 8, lower case (to match history template)

All drawings to be titled accordingly - both text and image left aligned.

Circulation+ Thresholds (public/ private, insideoutside) 

Fix layout according to template, icon is missing, check size of text.

Your analysis has to be more extensive and include sections. Thresholds include the transition to the outside, street and garden. You might need to add furniture to make the public/ private part believable. The red arrow is not successful, try a straight one, look at the template there is one you can use. And what is happening in the left part of the building, that is all white in your drawings? Draw what you write abut in the text.

Context + Costs

Did not receive pdf yet, only dwg – wrong format, please resend pdf

Concept (design principles)

Not a bad beginning, but try to draw what you explain in the text. Raumplan is not an easy thing to illustrate, and it doesn’t come through in your drawings yet. You might need to use arrows to show the connectivity of the rooms, vertically and horizontally. The plan is also divided into three zones, which doesn’t come through yet.

Suggestions for Design Template:

All annotations in Arial, point 8, lower case (to match history template)

All drawings to be titled accordingly - both text and image left aligned.

Might read better if plans run from bottom to top (i.e basement at bottom and 2nd on top)

Group seems to understand the design but might be able to convey connection from one level to the other better (i.e section, axo or clearer drawing).

Adaptability (Furniture/ programme/ Extension)

Analysis Tile:

You don’t follow the given template, please reformat accordingly. Your names do not appear on the analysis, the title is much too big, the icons are missing. Nothing fuzzy can appear on the drawing.

Drawings have to be in the same scale.

It is not understandable what is changing, how and why. Simply greying the area does not communicate enough, it actually doesn’t say anything. You need to re-furnish the house and explain the scenario. Show how many people live there in the original version and in the adapted one. Is is changing in the life of one family – children are leaving …or is it a change in general demand of rentable space, more living, less bedrooms?

Icon has been moved to left of margin.  Must sit within margins.

Text, "Scale" to be in italics.

Drawings and text should both be left aligned.

Analysis is weak, needs annotation illustrating the adaptations.

Where is analysis of how adaptation influences furniture, programme, extension etc?

Extension mis-spelled.

Colours suggested not used.

Look at the other drawings available/ iso, sections – can they add layers to your analysis  - if so – use them.

History Banner Row House:

Font incorrect, Arial

Remove all borders

Text indicating your not to template guidelines

All titles lower case

Don't need north point for ground floor plan

Improve sections

Doesnt follow 15 x 15 block

Images not to template format

Missing Wits logo

Suggestions for Design Template:

All annotations in Arial, point 8, lower case (to match history template)

All drawings to be titled accordingly - both text and image left aligned.

Façade/ Composition

You don’t follow the given template, not even in size, please reformat accordingly. This is meant to be designed in indesign…

To analyse the composition you need to show more than the facades themselves, you have to point out the rhythm of the openings, the sameness of the openings – (nearly) only one kind of window size. It is kind of mirrored in a certain sequence, show that. Draw one façade in a larger scale and explain that principle. Leave out the trees they are not relevant here. Will send sketch a bit later to explain more.

Structure + Material

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